The Past
Time to learn from our mistakes
Realizing opportunities we did not take
Problems that we came across
Praying daily that we wouldn't get lost
The Present
Living day to day
Hoping and hoping to find our way
In this world we live in today
The Future
Waiting all our life to be grown up
To be successful to make something of yourself
Only to wish to be brought back to your youth once again
When living in the present, knowing what would happen in the future
Predicting the outcome of others based on events from the past
Would you try and stop it?
Try to protect complete strangers from the terrible events they will soon face?
Or would you let them face it alone, for it is destiny.
This poem is really cool! I like the way you go from the past to the present, to the future. Also, I like how you ask questions at the end of your poem; it gives the reader something to think about. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really different sort of poem, and I like that. The way you pose a question at the end, it sort of reminds me of the way poetry was written in the early times, before the Rennaisance, like from 1000-1300AD. I know that's sort of nerdy to see the poem that way, but that's who I am, and why I liked that aspect of the piece. Also the topic is cool; I have an appreciation for work that tries to deal with more difficult topics.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you end it with a question, it really gets the reader to come away thinking about the poem. However, for this particular poem, I'm not sure if closed form is the best. It might just be me, but it seemed like the effort to rhyme took away from the piece. But anyway, your poem is great!
ReplyDeleteTaylorrr! This is a really good poem. I like the rhythm to it, and also how you ended it with a question. Great job:)
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