Falling with a sense of rhythm
Spiriling down to the bare, frosty ground
Autumn is here
Leaving trails as if showing where we've been
And where we have yet to go
Autumn is here
Glancing up the branch, half broken
Shaking amongst the winds
Autumn is here
The branch now almost empty,
Forced to face the winds alone
Autumn is here.
This is a good poem. I really like how you kept repeating Autumn is here. That really gave the poem a nice feeling. Maybe next time you could make it slightly longer, but other than that, it's great!
ReplyDeleteOkay, very cool poem. I absolutely love the repetition use here. It gave me the feeling of the bareness, the starkness of autumn stripping away the leaves from the trees. You know, sometimes we make th emistake of thinking a poem has to be long, or complex, but this is a good example of how simplicity is best at times. I'm looking forward to your next.
ReplyDeleteGreat job Taylor.. I really like how you have 'Autumn is here' all throughout the poem. Sometimes it can be hard to make it flow when you're trying to do repetition but i think you did a fantastic job with this. And by the way, I love your little picture thing. That is so cool!
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